Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sport and social activities are an important part of our lives, So they are as important as the classes and libraries and should receive the same amount of the financial support. they help students to feel frustrated and helps them to find friend from the different majors and helps them to broad their view. Some people believe that universities and colleges just must educate the academic material, since they overlooked the student mental and emotional needs. Others disagree with them. In my point of view, universities and colleges should have to give the same amount of the financial aid for sport and social activities and the classes and libraries for the
two main reasons.
First, sport and Social activities help students to get relax and concentrate to their lessons better. All of the student have some problems in their life beside their studies. Therefore, it would be better for universities to give some opportunities to their student for feel relax, gets energy, and focused better to their studies. For example, two years ago, I studied a new guard rail model. There is a few sources that I could find any thing to improve my knowledge and finish my thesis. I have lots of problems likes family problem, financial problems, that's why I feel depress and want to give up. One of my friends comes to help my. we both goes to the university pool and I swim there all the day which gives lots of energy to me and helps me to feel better. After a few day, its enable me to understand better, come up with better ideas to solve my problems. This experience thought me that how sport and social are important in our life.
Second, they can help students to find lots of friend from other majors and universities. I never can forget a friend that I find in the a social activity called " Help to environment". He is very nice man besides he was studying material engineering in one of the best universities in my country. When we talk, he advice my to his professor where I get my financial aid for my thesis experiments. Beside all, he and his professor demonstrate lots of concepts on that major which I never can understand just by my self. As you can see, how a social activity change the way of my life and help me to improve.
In sum, whether Sport and social activities help students to concentrate on the studies and help them to find friend from other universities and different major. we should all know that sports and social activities are so important to the student physical and mental health. Therefore, they should receive the same amount of money from universities and colleges.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...me and helps me to feel better. After a few day, its enable me to understand better, co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72984749455 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62884523502 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9515114093 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4583333333 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.125 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184240152618 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627705180911 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754927670182 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142156747632 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848274053206 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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