Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, young people are struggling with different issues to improve the quality of their lives. In this regard, while some people believe that young people do not give enough time to helping their communities, others hold the view that youth spend much time assisting their communities. Personally, I firmly concur with the latter groups. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, young persons are the pioneer in developing the technology of society, so they play a vital role in improving the conditions of society. To clarify, in the sophisticated world, each community is equipped with different problems and issues such as producing energy, medical drugs, processing of industry material to name but a few. Most of these problems would be solved by developing technologies. On the extreme word, the majority of projects in which technology is developing are conducted by native universities, and the majority of the academic population are young persons. Consequently, youth spend more time on researches and have an extreme effect on the flourishing of the societies and help them to be prosperous.
Secondly, one of the important factors for every society is participating in international competition and get the best global reward, and young persons are enough enthusiastic to compete with others. To be specific, it would be a great opportunity for the popularity of the community because it glories among other counterparts so that other societies will be interested in contributing to the society in different cases. Therefore, each community should choose a better person as much as possible to participate in such competitions and, needless to say, youths are the best choice. Youngsters have sufficient energy that can be used to compete with others and be a winner. As a result, their communities benefit from them.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned above into account, I do believe that young people give adequate time to helping their communities. They not only are the frontier of developing technologies but also can enhance the popularity of their societies among others in international competitions. (36 min)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32132963989 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0543052357 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545706371191 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9642338612 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0625 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275963984742 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780039925293 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0899889623797 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177307902923 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941262128708 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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