Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by majduleen on Wed, 11/29/2017 - 11:51

No doubt is that all the humankind when they have been adult, they start looking for a job. Some people think it is better for them to get the most secure job. In contrast, others prefer waiting the most satisfied job. And there are pros and cons for each side. However, I strongly believe that the prior thought is best from my point of view and I agree with them. To substantiate my case, the following paragraphs will illustrate my reasons to elaborate my preference.

To begin with, the first and the foremost point coming to the mind to ensure my standpoint is that getting the secure job means saving your time by doing useful working. In other words, waiting the satisfying job will lead to many problems like economic issues, also some psychological problems such as anxiety or depression. On the other hand, choosing the secure job will arrange the employee life. Moreover, the workers able to classify their priorities in complete form. As an illustration, they have the appropriate vision about the life and taking decisions.

Secondly, another vital point which should be taken into consideration is by choosing the secure job that means permanent income, that will rely on it the whole family. In spite of the fact the, the satisfying job is better than the secure one but almost it takes longer time to be active in your roles. For example, my brother is an engineer and he need a lot of years until getting the favorite job, so instead of waiting years without doing any things he is working nowadays in a small company because he want to take the experience that will enhance his future job.

All in all, due to aforementioned factors that I mentioned before, I believe that the secure job will improve the employee life in different aspects and there are myriad of advantages for it, furthermore they have to save their time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...pite of the fact the, the satisfying job is better than the secure one but almost...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in contrast, no doubt, such as, in other words, in spite of, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76397515528 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51314203237 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577639751553 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.932980225 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.266666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5333333333 5.45110844103 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302882449958 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986509007475 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524559046475 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178485121464 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448301550864 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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