Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
The question is whether it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life or not. In my perspective, being aware from the newest news not only is essential, but also it would affect on people's life even unrelated with their life. My arguments and reasons are listed below that will strengthen my point of view:
First of all, knowing about horrible events (like earthquake, war and flood and so on) in the world involves humanistic feeling, consequently these occurrence will profit from other people in other parts of the world. Numerous people like me and you will make decision to volunteer for aiming to innocent people. When there was not such a opportunity through TV, imagine how many people could have killed whereas they may have had the simplest the needs.
Second, having a total view about the world is able to provide worthwhile information for any cortex. Admittedly in this modern universe the first and the most vital factor for keeping up with other people is a high level of public information. It goes without saying that observing or hearing and or reading the world's happening rise up level of awareness among people who now are informed toward around of their world.
Third, being up-to-date severely will improve interpersonal skills as independence and or confidence in individuals. For instance, nowadays youth are inclined to take place the scientific seminars or serious meeting with their friends. If level of their knowledge than the world's events is high somewhat, they will not only embrace these types of meetings, but also they will prefer to attend in there and speak with an expressive sound without vibration.
As I have illustrated, knowing about occurrences of the world is a fundamental activity. It can be involved numerous benefits for both of the people and the world. It is not necessary that these events be related with our life, but the important thing is that degree of awareness is increased.
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Essay evaluation report
being aware from the newest news not only is essential, but also it would affect on people's life
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
If level of their knowledge than the world's events is high somewhat,
If the level of their knowledge about the world's events is high somewhat,
is that degree of awareness is increased.
is that the degree of awareness is increased.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 339 350
No. of Characters: 1646 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.291 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.525 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.684 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ot only is essential, but also it would affect on peoples life even unrelated with their ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this occurrence' or 'these occurrences'?
Suggestion: this occurrence; these occurrences
...volves humanistic feeling, consequently these occurrence will profit from other people in other ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nnocent people. When there was not such a opportunity through TV, imagine how man...
^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'whereas', 'while', 'for instance', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211956521739 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.157608695652 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0978260869565 0.0866891130778 113% => OK
Adverbs: 0.054347826087 0.046263068375 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0597826086957 0.0685040099705 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.152173913043 0.118717715034 128% => OK
Participles: 0.054347826087 0.0351676179071 155% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59648021795 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0163043478261 0.0309702414327 53% => OK
Particles: 0.00271739130435 0.00188951952338 144% => OK
Determiners: 0.0815217391304 0.0887237588012 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0298913043478 0.0209618222197 143% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00815217391304 0.0139019557991 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2024.0 2387.08602151 85% => OK
No of words: 339.0 408.028673835 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.97050147493 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.34808259587 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.238938053097 0.251872472559 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174041297935 0.174417080927 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117994100295 0.112833075102 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59648021795 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569321533923 0.524397521467 109% => OK
Word variations: 63.1232645553 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 24.2142857143 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.555237582 48.84282405 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.571428571 120.699889404 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 48.108091024 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.54 1.45489161554 106% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468819370825 0.300154397459 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110398164007 0.103427244359 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0587057417045 0.0752933317313 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.56349635945 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113154395403 0.151897553556 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194754432926 0.114077575197 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.16907255268 0.0781384742642 216% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.233648829082 0.336927656856 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0525336678236 0.067059652881 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300883470124 0.210909579961 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143172268787 0.0618886996521 231% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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