Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It is crystal clear that in every moment, many events are happening all around the world. Nowadays, due to the development of social medias, it is more simple to be aware of hot news of other places that we do not have any access to them or even we have not heard of it before. Some may hold this view that it is necessary to know about the events happing around the world, even if it has not straight effect in our daily life. However, some others may hold an opposite viewpoint and adhere to the idea that it is not important to know about events that are unlikely to affect people's life. I strongly agree with the former idea and following paragraphs will vindicate my viewpoint.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that behind every news, there is a lesson for others. In other word, each event happened someday may occur in the future too. As a result, knowing how to cope with each events, not only is not harmful but also it may be helpful for a safe life. It is crystal clear that gaining experiment depends on a myriad factors and it needs time to improve it. Hence, it is practical to use others' experiments to have a bright future. Taking myself as an example, when I was at high school, I followed NASA's news most of the times. On that time, my friends always were on the opposite side of me and told me do not waste my time for the events that may not influence in my daily life. In their view, it was not possible to live on other planets. When I went to university, I chose my thesis about the life on other planets and now I am working on the equipment's development cruisers. I feel how that information that were someday impractical, now is the basis of my job.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that human cannot be indifferent toward the environment, other people, moral activities and so forth. If we want to have a better life, one of the best way is that feel responsibilities on other events. Sometimes, events happening around the world does not affect our life directly but we may have influence on it in the near future. Taking my country, as an example, when it was a drought in Uganda, Africa, Iran was one of the most helpful in giving hand to them. By sharing news about this event and due to the helpful characteristic of Iranian people, they feel sympathy with them and tried a lot to help them. If we were not aware of that event, we would not do in such a way.
Taking all the aforementioned into account it can be concluded that events happening all around the world is like a chain. In other word, nowadays news of one country will be the future events of the other one. Having enough information about current events is not detrimental. In fact, it is important to be aware of events occurring nowadays, to make decision for the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
...e have not heard of it before. Some may hold this view that it is necessary to know ...
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Line 2, column 590, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
... of the times. On that time, my friends always were on the opposite side of me and told me ...
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Line 2, column 884, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'equipments'' or 'equipment's'?
Suggestion: equipments'; equipment's
...her planets and now I am working on the equipments development cruisers. I feel how that i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, i feel, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41392649903 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49328644486 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456479690522 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5533962513 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.28 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.68 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.24 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278988568692 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752938671021 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711480699417 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188545735868 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975257309145 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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