Governments have variable ways to improve services offered its citizens. Some may allocate more budget to build a good internet network. On the other hand, some others would be interested to spend the money on enhancing the public transportation system.
To start with, spending more money on public transportation system can make mobilization of people in the cities easy and at low cost. First, cities is known to be crowded with people, and if every person wants to use his own car, it is going to be very crowded.By improving the public transportation system, everybody would be encouraged to use buses, train, and underground instead of using his or her own car, which is going to reduce traffic jam and allow a person reach his destination punctually. Second, a better public transportation system means cleaner environment. Cars emit carbon dioxide to the air which causes pollution. Thus, it harms the health of people. with more cars being used. more carbon dioxide is released into the air. As a result, we are creating an unhealthy situation. Thirdly, it is economically advantageous to use public transportation instead of using one's car. For example, it costs me around $ 15 to go to work every day by driving my car. However, the cost of using the underground is only $ 7 . Therefore, by using public transportation system I can save half the amount each day.
On the other hand, internet services are also crucial to people. That is because of different reasons. First, the internet allows better communication between individuals. A person can use the internet to make phone calls, send E-mail, and use Facebook. Without internet, communication is impossible. Secondly, Internet allows people to make their purchases online. Again, this is a an important advantage that internet provided. Instead of going to shops to make shopping, a person can purchase his things at ease without having to commute and spend long hours on the roads. Finally, internet allows people to study online. Many people who are not lucky enough to be accepted to study at the university may be able to get a degree online. My friend is a compelling example of such situation. He was not accepted to study at the university because he could not leave his parents. However, when he was accepted to join an online program, he join and was able to get his degree.
To sum up, life cities, governments may be obliged to consider public transportation as a priority and pave the way for private investors to be introduced to provide some internet services.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, for example, as a result, to start with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97887323944 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87473738997 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523474178404 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.5753786876 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1379310345 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6896551724 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65517241379 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162035998482 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434351275683 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408647384656 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111622782489 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397656695605 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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