Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In civilized society, it is common that everyone has a television on home. it is one of the essential need of each family. it is widely accepted that, even though movies and television have positive effects, its disadvantages carry more weights. I contend that I totally disagree with this point of view. In the followings paragraphs, I will delve into two conspicuous reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it can be used as educational method. For example, when I was a bachelor student, I needed to know more about my field of study. but there was little hard copy sources for my major. And also, in that days, access to the internet was too hard, which was caused I had barely access to online sources. so that, for increasing my knowledge, I used to watch documentary.
Another equally important point is that it is an economical way to experience something. For example, I like travelling very much. but I am not able to afford the cost of travelling. so, I use television programs as a way to become more familiar with rituals of other country. there is a program, Around the World, which show an episode every week about one city of different countries. In this series, they speak to indigenous of that city, and also learn about specific food of them.
To make a long story short, I think there are positive facets for watching television on the juveniles behavior. I can state that it can be worthwhile in the use as educational and it is also economical. it depends on the way you use it. If you use it in the correct way, you can gain from it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, while, as to, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6161971831 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68832436276 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9559241793 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.55 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131255085057 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037677157041 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444884725129 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825934917089 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496222709097 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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