Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people are so busy with their goal and try to enhance more knowledge and skill to survive in society. However, a plethora of people contents that taking a risk for the new things is impractical and others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believed that to be a successful person people should try new things and should take a brave decision. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound subsequent followings.
To commence with, to achieve a goal people must take the risk otherwise dream never come true. Besides, from those risks, we can experience a lot which really helpful for the future. Moreover, it makes people more skilful, knowledgeable and eventually they will discover himself as a new way. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. In high school, I was interested in engineering and technical site. But, I was not good at the academic site. Thus, some of my family members suggest me to take a different subject which is better for me. But, I was stubborn and took the challenged. After four years of diligent work, I finally successfully graduated from the university and also a month later I got a job offer from one of the best multinational company. Therefore, If I did not take a risk I will never fulfil my dream.
Furthermore, taking risk is the best way to prove himself and also makes us brave and bold. People will never prove himself in society if they do not try something new. For instance, we all know about Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg, Steve Jobe because they tried something innovative for the society. It is not like that they become successful in one day. They took every risk and handle efficiently with their skill and tried to apply that knowledge in the real world.
To recapitulate, I am on the opinion that people become successful because they willing to take a risk and try sometime new and innovative. In addition, by taking bold and adept plan also makes them a progressive person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84831460674 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78499159733 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542134831461 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5550922347 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4545454545 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24555053543 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666179839583 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664622548236 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157320067612 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442837698305 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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