Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
People with different ages have different desires. A child may have some ambitions that are boring for an adult. A youth may have some tendencies that are not interesting for old people. One of the differences between younger people and older people is distinguished in following celebrities. I think old people have less interest in celebrities, while they are more important for young people because not only do they have more motivation and energy, but also they are more likely to have a role model.
The first reason that can be stated here is that young people are more activate rather than old people. Youth like to find their celebrities in their favorite fields like athlete, music, entertainers, actor, and so on. They feel amazing when put the postures of the celebrity on the wall, also they follow the famous person in social networks. They like to copy behaviors, way of dressing, and other personality of the famous person in the life. However, old people are tired and are more involved with the old age problems. They do not have energetic to follow and proud famous people.
The other reason that deserves some words here is that youth always want to have a model in their life to walk on the model path. Any young person has some dreams and goals. For example, a young soccer player will make Ronaldo as a hero then follow him. He will do his best to become a person like his model. Ronaldo is like a stimulation for the youth. On the contrary, old people do not need any people to follow because they passed their life and do not have enough energy and time to make their dreams true.
To summarize, celebrities are important for younger people, while old people do not care to them. The main reason is motivation and energy that is declined in old people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, while, for example, i think, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67619047619 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37265007533 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463492063492 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2823532152 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5263157895 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5789473684 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268369183362 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898043454698 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845022293796 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176768787633 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583592917589 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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