do you agree or disagree with this statement. today's young people do not give enough time to helping their communities
Nowadays, life is so much harder than in the past, and time would pass so much faster than before. People have to do so many tasks during a day. I firmly agree with this idea that today's young people do not give enough time to helping their communities. I have this idea because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, all the communities' atmosphere compels young people to continue their education to higher degrees. Such as their parents and their schools may extend pressure on them, the whole competitive atmosphere that exists among young people, the financial position that they want to reach in the future, etc. As a result, they have to spend so many times in other that be successful in their lessons. And no extra time remains for them to want to help their communities, even some times they do not have enough time to follow their interests. My own experience demonstrates this concept very well. When I was 18, and I just got admitted to the university, my father bought me a professional camera. I loved to take some pictures from orphan children and print for them, for charity. I did it for a while, but after some time, my lessons in university took all of my time, and I could not continue it anymore.
Second, some young people do not like to help their communities, even if they have time. I believe that in today’s world children change so much than the past, and they are so much selfish that they do not care anyone else. It has several reasons. It may have its roots in their families or their schools or their communities. I have a good example of this situation. I live in Iran, and I work in a kindergarten. All of the children in this kindergarten are from wealthy families, and I see how to spoil some of them are. Although I believe that we should respect children so much, on the other hand, we should teach them respect for others and be nice to other people. I really can not imagine how selfish they can be in their future because I see how their parents treat them and spoil them. This is obvious these kids never help their community at all in the future because they do not learn to care about others.
To sum up, I definitely agree with this idea that today’s young people do not help their community like before. Because some of them really do not have enough time, and they are so engaging in their own lives. On the other hand, there are some young people that they do not any interest in helping their communities since they do not learn to.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communities'' or 'community's'?
Suggestion: communities'; community's
...ollowing essay. First of all, all the communities atmosphere compels young people to cont...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... so much than the past, and they are so much selfish that they do not care anyone el...
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Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
... in Iran, and I work in a kindergarten. All of the children in this kindergarten are from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, even so, such as, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48164146868 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39908294782 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442764578834 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7798710673 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.52 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374216518803 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124560743779 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147887692838 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300239336093 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10957061784 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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