famous entertainers and athletes are more important for younger people rather older people. do you agree or disagree?
Without any exaggeration, nowadays some youth worship some athletes such Cristiano Ronaldo. Naturally they tend to imitate an athlete’s behaves or unquestionable accept his opinion about everything, politics as example. Not only have recently conducted studies shown that famous entertainers are important for young people, also can change their personality. Furthermore experiment has shown it is less important for older people. I am of the opinion saying that famous person are less important for older people. In what follows, I will cogently delve to my conspicuous reasons in order to justify my stand points.
Firstly, the most important reason which is worth being taken an account is that older people have earned more experienced during their lives. Older people try to avoid imagination. They have some important problems in their lives to deal with. Controversy juvenile have the tendency to redundant renowned people acts in order to pursue their dream of being such a person who they imitate from. Take it as a personally experience, when I was a child, I watched all of Bruce Lee action movies and in my dream I wanted to be like Bruce Lee, an extraordinary actor , because I was emotional, but I had my father sit next to me watching the movie without any special sense. Also I never become an actor since my decision wasn’t irrational. All was about emotion.
Secondly, another pivotal reason which stands out more is that older people have become what supposed to become. As human ages his taking risk ability will decrease. Older people are reluctant to take risk and make a change in their routine schedule, somehow they find their age gone. In opposite side, young people have a lot of time, energy, spirit and numerous plans for their future. They want to build best future and that’s because they follow the most successful person, their champion. For example when I talk to my father about change our business or doing something new the only thing that I hear every time is that it’s your turn. I have done enough.
To wrap it up, contemplation aforementioned reason above, one can effortlessly conclude that famous entertainers and athletes are more important for adolescences rather than mature and older people for two main reason. First, young people have good imagination for their future, second, they have more energy, plan, and defiant spirit for future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09873417722 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68836823045 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567088607595 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.6656022944 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5454545455 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9545454545 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271907341384 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837439830806 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914652972079 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188951395764 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897780399019 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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