In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
There are a plethora of reasons why human life spans are longer than ever before. In my opinion, there are two main reasons why people are living longer, which are improvements in medical technology and working conditions. In the following essay, I will explore these two reasons in detail.
First of all, medical technology has developed in amazing ways, and can both prevent and cure many different illnesses. Hundreds of diseases that might have killed us in the past can now be treated in safe and non-invasive ways. Not only that, but technology can be used to identify potential illnesses even before they occur. For example, I was told that my great-grandfather died of a heart attack when he was just forty-five years old, despite appearing outwardly healthy to his family. However, thanks to modern medicine, I now know that males in my family are genetically predisposed to heart disease. Thanks to this information I know to be extra-careful about my diet and when I exert myself. When I am older I will begin taking blood thinning medicine as a preventive measure. My great-grandfather did not have access to the predictive power of modern medicine and was not able to protect himself like I do today.
Secondly, improved working conditions help us live longer, as humans today have safer and less strenuous jobs than people in the past. My great-grandfather was not the only male in my family to die at a young age, as his brother passed away when he was in his fifties. His brother did not die from heart disease, but died from lung disease brought on by many years of working in a dirty coal mine. The physical toll of his work and the dusty air he breathed every day caused him to develop cancer, which eventually claimed his life. He was not the only person in his society to be killed by his job, as it was common for men and women to work in dangerous resource extraction jobs, or to put in twelve hour days at terribly unsafe factories. People back then had neither safe working conditions nor effective safety equipment. Modern workplace safety rules and regulations, however, prevent the same tragedies from happening today.
In conclusion, I believe that people are living longer today for two main reasons. They are that doctors have access to a wide range of technology to both cure and prevent illnesses, and because our jobs are safer and less taxing than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ing ways, and can both prevent and cure many different illnesses. Hundreds of diseases that mi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76682692308 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70926898855 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536057692308 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7524443559 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.15 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132843985276 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450859441717 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515667749901 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972884430213 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649729201848 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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