Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
From the ancient time, people tended to gather in groups. They did it for many reasons, such as in order to protect each other from invaders or to defeat a bigger game during the hunting. Life has been changing since. Indeed, modern people do not have to hunt in order to survive. Even though, the value of being a part of a society for many people is tremendous. Groups or organizations protect people from being lonely and can contribute to enhancing of humans` intelligence.
First of all, groups prevent people from loneliness. In any society, every person can find someone with the common interests in life and build the friendship. Friends are very important to have for most of the people since friends support us when we have difficult life circumstances, they laugh with us when we are happy, and they give advice when we need it. When people have friends, they are not alone. For example, when I just moved to the United States I had nobody to interact with in this country. I was very lonely. So, I joined group classes in the local educational center not only for a reason to improve my English but because I wanted to find someone I would be able to become friends with. Luckily, I met a woman from Peru, who is now, a very close friend of mine. We spent a lot of time together, and she made my life more colorful during my adaptation in the new environment. If I had not sought for an opportunity to meet other people, I would never have found a person to share my thoughts and emotions with. To that end, groups help people to connect.
Secondly, in an organization people can learn something new from each other. In my country, people say that the person, who possesses the information, operates the world. Indeed, these days, with the fast developing technology and constant progress in any field, it is crucial to stay updated in the case to excel. That is why people create a different kind of clubs of interests. In these organizations, specialists assemble to share they knowledge. For instance, as a pharmacist, I am interested in innovations in the pharmaceutical industry. For that purpose, I have joined a few groups on Facebook, where pharmacists from all around the world share their professional experience. From this interaction, I have been learning a lot about new drugs and modern methods of medical treatment. Although I can increase my professional knowledge by reading special magazines, they sometimes lack important details and nuances. So, organizations serve people as the pivotal source of self-education.
To conclude, I think that groups or organizations are important for the human being because they save people from loneliness and facilitate to intellectual growth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87688984881 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86027182702 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533477321814 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 5.0 0.994623655914 503% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3339598953 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6428571429 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5357142857 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229118739059 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675445746237 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073613226347 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170813811142 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396296576714 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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