A high school that normally gives students about two months of time off from school during the summer is introducing a new educational requirement for students in eleventh grade (ages 16-17) over the summer, students have the following two options to fulfill the new requirement. – They can attend classes each day for several weeks to complete a university level course on a subject that they are considering selecting as their major field of study at university. – They can spend several weeks traveling to museums and historic places in their area with a group of students guided by a teacher and then write a paper of their experience. Which one of these options do you think would be most beneficial for students and why?
In the modern era, education has played a prominent role in all societies. Due to it is paramount importance, researchers have always searched for ways to enhance the educational system. Some people may hold the view that the best ways for students who have age 16 _ 17 years old are taking some course which they are familiar with a field that they can choose in the university. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that the beneficial way is that the students will go the science trip which they are visiting some museum and finally they will write some report from their experience. I personally contend that if a student takes some course that relates to the university field, it does not only help them to choose field base on their interest but also they will become a successful person. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite factor to be mentioned is that the children who take some course before choosing their university field have indulged by having information about the position of jobs that relate to the major. To elaborate on my point, since students have adequate information about university fields, they can choose a proper field which has intelligence and interest for them. As we know, the university major determines future career and life so that it is far important to select a major with benefit future situation. A significant example that strikes in my mind about my own experience. When I was a student, I wanted to study mechanical engineering. But, my school took some course and shown to us which lessons we had to taken at university and gave important information about the job situation. After this course, I changed my decision, because I found that mechanical engineering is not suitable for me, and now I glad that I did not choose mechanic engendering.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that when the students have some background about the lesson that they must choose for a university, beyond a shadow of a doubt, they become more successful than other students. To shed more light on this matter, inasmuch as students have remarkable information about lessons at the university, they can better schedule for studying. In other words, since most professors in universities are very engaged, and they have numerous students, they do not have adequate time to learn their students how they must study their lessons impressively; therefore, if students have benefit background about the lesson, they will become the flourishing student.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned lead us to the conclusion that takes some course which gets some information about university field is necessary for the student. I believe that the student who takes some corse before choose the major not only select the better option but also have strong information about lessons which help the students become a prosperous person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 745, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...d, it does not only help them to choose field base on their interest but also they wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.0286738351 254% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03462321792 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71023610305 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474541751527 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9273097822 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.333333333 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2777777778 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187796998089 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711067127201 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445169419063 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132288410725 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239853555656 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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