When it comes to choosing a solid career, there are many factors affecting your choice. Sometimes we have to work in a certain job just because it was the best available option we could get. However; if I can choose any job I desire I would want to be an actor. There are many reasons why I choose to be an actor, and I will demonstrate them in my following essay.
First, since I was a little girl I always watched Hollywood movies and admired all the actors and all those characters they played. My passion for movies and shows made me so eager to react many scenes I saw the movies I really liked. Also while growing up I had many famous stars who have been my role models and I had so much passion to follow their life style in any way I could find possible. One time I remember vividly is when I went to Los Angeles and visited Hollywood, I was only 9 years old and I met Jennifer Lopez " the famous singer/actors" I reached to her and told her I want to be like you when I grow up! she smiled and me and gave me a warm hug which made me the happiest girl in Hollywood.
Second, I would love to be an actor because actors get the chance to explore the world. They would always be given the opportunities to fly to different parts of the world because of the nature of the their work. Not to mention, all the famous people they meet,and not just other famous actors but also famous politicians and world leaders. Another things which are not less important are the high salaries and the high life style they would enjoy. Of course Its not always guaranteed that you will make it a successful actor, if so then many people will choose that for living, and maybe that is way I had to choose a more secure job which is accounting. as after all you need a job that can hold you a stable income. Which can be hard to accomplish if I pursue my passion for acting. Although I do need a safe job that can help me cover my monthly bills but I will still always try to follow my dream and become an actor when the right time comes.
Finally, I would definitely choose to be an actor if i would get choose my dream job. It is the perfect job for me and I will keep trying to become an actor one day as that was my dream since I have always remembered.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
...the best available option we could get. However; if I can choose any job I desire I wou...
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...emonstrate them in my following essay. First, since I was a little girl I alway...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, then, while, after all, another thing, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.15261958998 4.8611393121 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31937422283 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4715261959 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9884762596 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.277777778 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225584389552 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806932938086 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809849527144 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156261031961 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610082677553 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.09 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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