If you have extra money, are you happier giving it to charity or spending it yourself?
Beyond a shadow of doubt, money is the main driving force of our lives. Without being financially stable, I cannot even imagine to live. But still we sometimes forget about the people who are deprived of this resource. In this regard, some people like to donate the extra amount of money they have while others are inclined towards spending it on themselves. Certainly, I concur with the former opinion, it is important to give your extra money to poor and needy people. In the following paragraphs, I would like to delve into the reasons and examples to substantiate my viewpoint.
First, the remarkably potential reason is the feeling of satisfaction you would gain by donating money to people enduring hardships in their lives. To elucidate, by eliminating their problems you will be helping them to live better and improved lives. This can be really satisfying as it would give you immense pleasure and happiness. On the top of that, money you would be granting will provide a great relief to needy people. Also, they would give you blessing for a healthier life. My recent experience is a good case in point. During my vacations, I visited an orphanage where I meet two little twins. When I offered them money for buying study stuff, they were highly elated. I still recall the overwhelming joy on their face and they gave me lots of blessing to be successful in my life. This is how donating your extra money can be helpful essentially for an economically weaker section of society.
The second reason for my view of giving my extra money is that it will make you realize the value of money, good that money can do. This way you will be appreciating money and will feel gratitude toward the god for blessing you will this precious resource. Even in our religion Sikhism, we are instructed to offer one-tenth part of our salary for the welfare of poor people. My father’s example will be a good illustration of this point. Since my childhood I have watched my father giving a part of his salary to needy. In this way we could know the real worth of money and express our thanking to almighty for this blessing.
In conclusion, I would like to reaffirm my viewpoint that it is better to give money to charity. To recapitulate, donating money for the welfare of poor people can give you internal peace at the same time making others happy. Furthermore, you can express gratitude to god and know the importance of money by observing people who are really in need of it. Therefore, due to the aforementioned reasons one should also choose to give extra money to charity instead of spending it on unimportant subjects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'imagine living'.
Suggestion: imagine living
...being financially stable, I cannot even imagine to live. But still we sometimes forget about th...
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Line 2, column 261, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ive better and improved lives. This can be really satisfying as it would give you immense pleasure a...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l be a good illustration of this point. Since my childhood I have watched my father g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7211328976 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62371607929 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483660130719 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1681342474 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.3461538462 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6538461538 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314057976455 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896810983278 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772230838342 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216120098831 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599799207974 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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