You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the
community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your
community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Volunteering a few hours each week to some community activity is an important way of investing in the future of our society. I choose to spend my time working with elementary school children helping them learn to read. Developing good reading skills will help these students keep up with their classmates, open new worlds to them, and help them succeed in life.
First of all, students who are not good readers cannot keep up with their studies. They will not understand the lessons; they will come to school unprepared and they will not be able to perform. By learning to read, students will be on an equal footing with their classmates. They will be active participants in class.
Secondly, books on different lifestyles, occupations, cultures, or governments will open new doors to students. Students who can't read will only know what they see around them. Students who can read will be able to travel to new worlds and experience new ideas without ever leaving their classrooms. Moreover, today, a person who can't read is severely handicapped. A non-reader will have to work at the most menial jobs. Readers, especially good readers, have the whole universe open to them. They will have the possibility to learn any job that interests them.
In short, by volunteering to help an elementary school child learn to read, I am helping him or her not only today, but for the rest of his or her life. I am helping them keep pace with their peers and explore the world and themselves through books.
- Ecotourism as a possible solution for ameliorating the conditions of rainforest area and its people 70
- If you have extra money are you happier giving it to charity or spending it yourself 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because today s world is so busy and crowded we should not expect people to be polite to one another 83
- Declining population of yellow cedar species 86
- Parents should express their disapproval towards the teachers of their children when the parents do not agree with the way the teachers are teaching 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...pen new doors to students. Students who cant read will only know what they see aroun...
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Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...assrooms. Moreover, today, a person who cant read is severely handicapped. A non-rea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1241.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 258.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81007751938 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60089071937 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554263565891 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 360.9 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0839965859 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5625 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0683180527725 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0284798316531 0.076458572812 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0217297390907 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0421797108511 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260286902532 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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