Celebrities such as singers and footballers are always on television and newspapers. Ordinary people, on the other hand, rarely comes out on in the news. But what are the reasons?
Publishing news related with celebrities are what most people want because fans are eager to know what their actor or artist are doing. Take Christiano Ronaldo as an example, as a massive fan of football, I often get the latest news through the Stars Online article as it is extremely hard to get the information regarding his injury or contract with the football club. This is because the celebrities are cannot be contacted by normal people unlike our daily message with acquaintance.
Another thing is that people can know about the achievements of a particular celebrities. When we find out that they have earned a prestigious award, it gives us a great sense of determination to work harder. As a result media plays an essential role to the viewers.
However, the media could just publish an article in order to attract viewers because when a renowned person appears on the news, I the corporation thinks that it would gain more viewers. It goes without saying that money plays a huge factor in this case. Even if a newspaper did decide to write a story about a famous person, the news could be false. In fact, ordinary people are not likely to appear on the news because of their meaningless status even though they did an incredible job.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that public are always hungry for gossip and updates in relation to celebrities. Therefore, media is always about celebrities, but we can never forget that the media do this to just attract more viewers and readers.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the e-greder gave a low mark because Coherence and Cohesion are low, look:
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0993035669344 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349074557472 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392940507178 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.063387962262 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430568682806 0.056905535591 76% => OK
2. some grammatical errors:
Ordinary people, on the other hand, rarely comes out
Ordinary people, on the other hand, rarely come out
This is because the celebrities are cannot be contacted by normal people
This is because the celebrities can not be contacted by normal people
I the corporation thinks that it would gain more viewers.
the corporation thinks that it would gain more viewers.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 289 350
No. of Characters: 1359 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.702 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.66 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'celebrity'?
Suggestion: celebrity
... about the achievements of a particular celebrities. When we find out that they have earned...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... sense of determination to work harder. As a result media plays an essential role ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, another thing, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86505190311 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66915938538 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57785467128 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.301314319 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0993035669344 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349074557472 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392940507178 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.063387962262 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430568682806 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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