Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
And organization that gives people money to start their own small business
And organization that provides medical care to people in need
donating money to charities is one direct way to have contribiution to reduce the poverty in our society. Amonge all philentropic activities which we could do for people in need, such as provides food, medical care, facilities and thats sort of things, in my opinion donating money to make job for poor one has a lot of advantagous. The ensuing pragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First, provides an opportunity for poor people to start their own business not only could help poor people to be self-sufficient, strong and independent, but also indirectly could help a wide variatey of people in a society. one example could drive this notion home. if a poor people who is supported by charities, start his own job for instance cultivate cotton in a farmland, some other members of that society could take advantage of this issue. To be specific, a farmer need some workers helping him, some drivers to arrive his products to cities and sell theme to factories which needed cotton to make cloths and so on. Therefore, in this way not only we help to a poor people to be financial independent, but also we indirectly make job for some the other people.
Secondly, providing job opportunity for poor people is one help for their whole life. To be specific, people who are depend on charities for their foods, medical care and their other vital needs are so vulnreable. In other word, what will happen for these people if charities give up sopporting them or alter their strategies and devote the money to other philentropic activities? Of course they will get into troubles in this catasterophic situation so, they need a continously support during their lives time. However, charities can devote one money in one time to open up a new bussines for people in need and then they could develop their job by hardworking and the charities could focus on other poor people.
In conclusion, if I want to put some money to charities, I prefer to provides a chance for poor people to open up their own job. this is because it is one support for their whole life time and not only help them to became self-sufficient, but also provides indirect job for other people in that society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, of course, sort of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77105263158 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70535915251 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463157894737 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.9515832329 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.866666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247214525597 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106581834379 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612870608984 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179280106996 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235540764564 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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