Independent TOEFL essay - TPO 13: A/D? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
As a social beings, people are always want to live in the sphere where we can find intimacy, love and solidarity among the people. Nowadays, business of the people brings social circle in much constricting form. people have also different opinion on how much should be connected with close people; some people believe relatives is less important now as they want to live life of their own or other believe that relatives are always important even they like to live a personal life. In my opinion, relatives is important as they were in the past as they form the circle more solid and overcome the feeling of aloneness in person's life.
relatives is always a good companion to share a feeling when a person feels very hard in their life. people becomes more busy and busy day by day. they even have hardly time to make a friend to whom they can share their hardness of their life; hope to get sympathy and suggrestion to the related problem. At that time, people only have one sphere where they connected by birth: relatives. it is still possible that they have some time for us to listen our problem even they are busy enough. At least they is frequent chance you express your situation in certain occasion with them. For instance, me and my cousion rarely meet with eachother however, as I was connected with them from childhood, it is still posssible for me to share my problems with my cousion when we meet at least a fewer times. therefore, relatives are much easy approach to share your feelings and find the solution of your problem in the difficult times.
Solidarity comes from we feeling which is most often seen only in the relatives. Blood relation is stronger to keep you join with eachother. A part from that, you and your relatives have similar taste in most of the matter.; same culture, tradition, gather for celebrating event and fight against the common problems. hardly, it is possible for individual to get along with strange to form this kind of similarity and unity. Top of the all, it relatives who make people become unflappable in society when terrible happens to them. For example, once my father was severly ill, my family became so helpless as the main man of my home was in hospital. At that time, we got immense support from my uncle and aunt and that helped my family to remain strong on that situation. so, realtives is important to be strong when we have difficult times in your life.
In conclusion, problems and isolation is increasing in today's world; therefore, to becomes mentally fits and strong, relatives support is always essential.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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As a social beings, people are always want to live in the...
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...ocial circle in much constricting form. people have also different opinion on how much...
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...feeling of aloneness in persons life. relatives is always a good companion to share a f...
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...a person feels very hard in their life. people becomes more busy and busy day by day. ...
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... becomes more busy and busy day by day. they even have hardly time to make a friend ...
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...ere they connected by birth: relatives. it is still possible that they have some t...
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...ily to remain strong on that situation. so, realtives is important to be strong wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72283813747 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44232189912 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490022172949 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4398576681 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.054422897537 0.236089414692 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0155088838175 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269779109535 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.033059832851 0.150856017488 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295943147387 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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