Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

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Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Throughout history, a job has played a prominent role in all societies. Due to it is paramount importance, the researcher believes that people must have the satisfying sense about their jobs. A controversial question which is often raised this idea that whether people must spend three days a week for long hovers work or spending days a week with shorter times. I personally contend that labor force who spend 3 days for work has many advantage points than people who spend 5 days a week for doing their jobs; therefore, I agree with this proposal. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.

The first exquisite factor to be mentioned is that the labor force with 3 days a week for long hours work has several positive aspects than other labor force. To elaborate on my points, since people who work for 3 days a week, they have 4 days free which can spend with their family members. This father and mother spend many times with their children so that they can better supervisor of the children in many cases such as doing assignments, eating food, and many other similar positions. Therefore, they can raise their offspring as they wish. In other word, as parents consume several hours with children so that they establish a strong bond with children. a significant example that strikes in my mind in about my experience. When I was the student, my mother worked for 3 days. So she spends many times with me and my brothers so that we played and studied with my mother and she solved our problem. As the result, at this time, we have an excellent relationship with each other. It helps us to improve our lives and use my mother experience in many cases.

Another reasons which deserve some words here is that citizenship with 3 days work can save money in several ways. To shed more light on this matter, since this labor force stays home about 4 days, they can reduce spend money in several ways like getting the bus for children or nursing for caring for their children. Also, when most people do not go to work in rush hours, the traffic, air pollution, and consuming energy are increased. Based on the most recent study by Iran Census Bureau, 63% of air pollution is reduced at the 4 days end of a week, when most labor force does not go to work.

To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that labor forces with 3 days work a week have many positive aspects than other people. I believe that the labor force with 3 days works not only can spend many times with their families but also can saving money in several ways

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 662, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: A
... establish a strong bond with children. a significant example that strikes in my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, such as, in many cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58583690987 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37894192791 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478540772532 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7390310011 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.761904762 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.80952380952 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269875407987 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901251981919 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074895954194 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19120129924 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048612310576 0.0645574589148 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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