independenttpo46
In my opinion the options of celebritices, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are not more important to younger people than they are to older people. I think because the mind and the way of thinking are very diferrent between the javanile and old ones so as a cnsecuense of this different the feature of the good person is varing between them. So, I will disccuss my idea by three reason and examples.
the first point I would like to make is that the young person always like the vitual things, specially at the modern life with the accessablity to the internet and sicial networks like Facebooks . etc. So, they want to see unsuall things froms thier celebrities. We can see this fact on the fesstivals or the film ceremonies which the young fan groups are expected some extraordinary things from thire celebrities. While, the mind of the old pesons are diferrent, they expect from thier celebrities some others kind features not the usuall options of them, more concreat possiblity like helpping the poor peoples at the Africa.
The second point I would lke to make is that, asince the ole one alway things long run aginst the young man who think short run, this options are more likely between the young people. For example, the new celebrities who has a lot of this spacial features of celebrities would be a very special person in the groups of the young man or womens. But, the old person never have any attention to this short run feature which at the new age, they can release them more easier that the one centure ago. for example Charly Chaplien was the celebrity of an age age, in the other word the pesone who lived at the 30's. the features of this pearson was so different to the new of, and when some of has seen him at that time, he/she can not be agreed by the need modes.
Finally, the young people always want some things that be at that moment which tthey be in action with that , so by this point of view, apparently they want the celebrites that have the momently appearence and not deeply thinkings. while, the old people do not search the shallow things at the personality of the on pearson, like the celebrite, but, they always see the whole of the one pearson , means the both sie of himself / herself, to know them.
at the end in my opinion the young man delibratly or not always have not any attention to the opinions of the celebrites but they like facical featuer of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56091954023 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37566529125 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471264367816 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.9638091244 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.266666667 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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