What do you prefer: Independent as soon as possible or getting in touch with their parents for a longer time
Many people have different opinion regarding this situation of living together or away from their parents. But in my view leaving your parents soon after you become an adult is absurd. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, we do have some duty and responsibility towards our parents. They have invested their love, care and, money on us from the very first day of our birth. They have some selfless hopes and desires from their child. Let's imagine a father thinking his child would give them his first salary. Not because they need them but it will satiate the feeling that they accomplished as a parent. But child moving out soon after they grow, hurts the sentiments of parents. For this reason, I think young adults need to stay with their parents for longer period of time.
Secondly, parents have dreamt a lot of things to do when their child grow up. For example: visiting pilgrimages, spending time with friends and family and doing a lot of things they could not do because of the responsibilities they had to bear. Drawing from my own experience, my mother always tells me, once you grow up, we will go to temples that are located very far away. They could not do a lot of things because of their child; I think when a child become adult it is his duty to take over his parent's responsibilities. It is certainly clear to see why a adult need to live with their families.
In conclusion, adult need to stay longer with their family to fulfill the responsibility their parents once had and to let their parents to do what they dreamt of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62717770035 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57950818894 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533101045296 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2099735584 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26360194353 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920312522674 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849448138636 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187255192817 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633991677556 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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