It is commonly believe that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
There is no doubt that human is naturally interested in being successful and happy. However, life is full of various difficulties which the most of them are not under our control. Therefore, it is clear that the failures are inevitable. In this regard, some people believe that being hopeful and optimistic during the failures is more prominent than the success. Personally, it is my firm conviction that although happiness is nearly related to someone’s accomplishments, the real satisfaction which is inside of someone’s spirit, even after a failure, is more worthy and important. To support my idea, I will discuss two precious factors in the following.
First and foremost, although being successful is sought-after desire in humans, the ability of being positive during misfortune is a rare talent which can improve the individuals’ skills. Actually, the most of the people miss their happiness after a small failure and stop to continue in order to obtain their goals. Therefore, not only they lose their happiness due to lack of an optimistic attitude, but also this disaster hinders their way to achieve fancy successes in the future. For example, when I tried to find a job position, I failed several times. Although the failures were really sad experiences to me, I boosted my knowledge, and the failures were really a blessing in a disguise which helped me to convert myself to a professional programmer. This accomplishment would never be achieved if I was disappointed for a long time. Indeed, each failure is a chance to learn; so, being optimistic not only decrease someone’s sadness during a failure, but also it is a motivation and lesson for converting to a perfect person.
Another factor that is important to consider is that failure is an inseparable part of our life; thus, we should accept it with all of our heart. In other words, who is always a winner? If you ask about the secret of success from the most famous people who are a role model in several activities such as sport, art and so forth, they undoubtedly will answer that they passed numerous difficulties and failures in order to be at that places. For instance, in my country, Iran, Sara Aliabadi who is a well-known actor, she was nominated for various international awards, says that many specialists rejected her, and said to her that she has not any talent. Nonetheless, she did not lose her hope and tried more and more for her aim. To make a long story short, we can not remove failure from our life; thus, it is a better idea to just accept it. This acceptance is utterly valuable and gives rise to inner peace in people.
To recapitulate, being happy after a failure is more important than anything else because it guarantees our peace of mind beside helping to remove our negative points. To put it differently, we can not be always a winner; so, live and learn in order to be successful in the next attempts.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, no doubt, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 15.1003584229 252% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84368737475 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83616061833 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5250501002 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6940546896 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.863636364 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6818181818 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77272727273 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182818679673 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485309053736 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406274428597 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112452622622 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229234444694 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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