It is commonly believed that in life success is not the most important thing It is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail Do you agree with this idea

Success and failure, the founding stone of our life, have been valued and even trigger heated discussion. In some people's views, success is the most important thing. Contrary to these people's views is my perspective that success is not the most crucial one. It is more significant to remain happy and optimistic when we fail due to its contribution to our health and personal quality.

What should be prioritized is that face failures optimistically. Keeping an open mind when we encounter setbacks is conducive to our mental health. In our daily life, we usually confront numerous difficulties and challenges and it is impossible to successfully address them all. Thus, we are likely to meet continuous failures. Failures may demoralize us, make us immerse in self-negation or even engender depression. Keeping an optimistic attitude, we are able to clam down and find solutions to motivate us to keep moving forward when we fail. That means we can still be satisfied even though we fail. Hence, we can secure mental health.

Moreover, a positive mindset also associates with better physical health and lower chances of having disease. Being optimistic produce biological factors that lower our blood suger level and boost the blood circulation. In addition, researches show that a optimistic mind set promotes the generation of Endorphin, which is a feel-good substance, making us feeling happy and bolster immunity. Therefore, one may have a longer life span and be less likely to get infections. In addition, people's mental and physical state are connected. Optimism leads to healthy behavior, which also benefits our physical health. For example, optimistic people are less likely to smoke and drink moderate levels of alcohol. Optimists' healthy actions lead to positive outcomes. These in turn prompt healthy activities, producing a cycle for good health.

Having a optimistic mindset facilitates us reap and harvest the maximum profit from the failures and solve problems. Optimistic people usually adopt approach-focused coping strategies, which rely on confronting a problem head-on and figure out ways to reduce severity. When that is impossible, they seek ways to manage and control it. After analyzing the setback, we are equipped with tactics that would be help us out when we encounter similar situations. For instance, an optimistic student with a poor score in exams may spend countless hours trying to find out unsolved problems and corresponding treatments. Then they seek advice from multiple professors, choose the most effective one and diligently stick with it, based on their consultation. Finally, they may make progress and pass the exams. Therefore, a positive mindset make failures profitable.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38785046729 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88948702985 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57476635514 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.730694379 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5172413793 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7586206897 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06896551724 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232813080535 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561652148836 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06190408922 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153525303113 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915684206475 0.0645574589148 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.39 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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