The neighborhood we live in is a very important part of our lives. It is where we spend most of our time and many years of our life. If a movie theater were going to be built in my neighborhood, some residents I’m sure would believe that it is a great idea; others would disagree. In my view, a movie theater would be a positive addition for two important reasons.
The main reason is that the addition will generate jobs. In order to build the theater, construction workers will be needed, architects, engineers, and many other people. This means that many people will have the opportunity to work. For example, in Knee city, my hometown, a new theater was built on our busiest street, Main Street. Before the theater was built, there was just open land. As the theater was being constructed, there were advertisements in the paper asking for construction workers. Many people applied and a few were able to work for the company. After its construction, the ads didn’t stop since they started looking for dozens of employees to run the theater. As you can see, these people wouldn’t have had the opportunity to work if it weren’t for the addition of the movie theater.
Another reason is that a new movie theater will add tax revenue for the city. Many people who might have stayed home to relax may decide to go to the theater instead. The money they spend at the theater is taxed. These tax dollars are new to the city and will add more tax revenue to help the city improve itself. For instance, after the theater in my hometown was built, it became very popular. My friends and I spent a lot more time in the area. Normally, we would go to a theater in a city about 15 miles away. After a year or two, we began to notice that our city was spending more money on our schools and streets. Normally, it would work on the streets, fixing potholes, every few years. Now, whenever there was a pothole, the city would fix it within a month. Our local newspaper said this was a result of the added tax revenue new businesses like the movie theater were adding. This experience taught me that new businesses are very beneficial for cities.
In sum, though some may oppose the plan, a new theater would be a great addition to my hometown or any other city. Not only will the addition generate jobs for residents but also the added tax revenue could help the city provide more for its residents. Every city should work to introduce businesses such as movie theaters into their community.
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- TOEFL T P O 2 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 75
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59020044543 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48758206766 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465478841871 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7802051094 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.6071428571 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0357142857 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17857142857 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156272881986 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492512549116 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413896941603 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109828052656 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00157297304664 0.0645574589148 2% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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