It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadays, thank to internet and its relating devices such as personal computers, cell phones, tablets and etc, all around the world can easily be aware of all the events and news from entire the world. Some people prefer to understand the latest news and events from whole the world, others do not concern about what is going on on the other side of world. As I am concerned we as a developed society must have more knowledge from other people, organizations,, events and so on. because not only does it make easier to contribute human being to prevent from ongoing disasters, but it also is helpful to improve ourselves and our society.
The first reason which should be pointed out here is that there are a lot of campaigns and communities which concern about moral values such as environment condition, animal extinction, plant maintenance, kids worker, global warming, woman problems and etc. These communities effort is not limit only their hometown or country, but they worry about the problems of all over the world. Therefore, they must be aware of upcoming news specially from their field. The outcome of their efforts is beneficial for whether directly or indirectly.
The other aspect to point out is that the physical barriers between the countries is not meaningful anymore because of the high rate of data flow in the world. So if one society has backward or stationary movement in comparison with the other world, its people and the society will be ignored by the others. Also, people inside such a society, maybe release their home towns and country specially educated persons who are always eager to find the ideal condition. Thus, there will be a positive feedback in which the problem get worser and worser.
In the final analysis, awareness of the events is crucial for every society to be alive and active for improvement of itself and others. Finally, it is suggested that spreading the public awareness a good tool for making a convenient world for all of earth’s owners.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and Televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 76
- Do you agree or disagree? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. 70
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 76
- Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 33, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: on
...hers do not concern about what is going on on the other side of world. As I am concer...
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Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive commas
Suggestion: ,
...owledge from other people, organizations,, events and so on. because not only does...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... worker, global warming, woman problems and etc. These communities effort is not limit o...
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Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communities'' or 'community's'?
Suggestion: communities'; community's
... warming, woman problems and etc. These communities effort is not limit only their hometown...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91445427729 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55382277627 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58407079646 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7403269486 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13148309188 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457778755842 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394933476408 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752372308511 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291925620508 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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