It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In the civilized and modernized society, it is axiomatic that people around the world tied to each other. A plethora of people possesses the conviction that knowing about events around the world will affect our daily life. whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I firmly believe that we must understand what is going around us to improve our direction of life. In the following, I am going to delve into the most outstanding reason to advocate my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the news around the world will affect other countries and consequently to every individual's life. I would like to start with the economy. Since all the countries around the world tied together economically, so every little change would present a huge effect on other countries. For example, I live in a country with having an oily economy that means the government manage the country by money earning by sailing oils and gas. In this matter, when other countries, for example, the united state strat to increase their oil production. As a result, the price of oil will decrease. Accordingly, my country goes to inflation in this situation which is caused a drop in income to every individual. it should be stressed that the effect of butterfly theory will apply situations.
another noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that, As we are living in an increasingly developed society, immigration have taken place in all society. it can give rise that every family has a relative in another country. As a result, every family should be worried about the event that happens around the world. I have a sister who immigrates to the united states. last year the president of us impose a new low for iranian immigration which didn't let to a relative of iranian immigration to fly and visit their family. I was so sad because I missed my sister a lot, besides she was going to have a baby. By and large, it is established beyond doubt that every person around the world depends on what happened in other societies.
To put it briefly, all enumerated reasons lead us to the conclusion that it is important to know events happening around the words because it will affect direct or undirect on our life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, briefly, but, consequently, first, if, so, whereas, for example, as a result, by and large, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82857142857 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62522244437 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524675324675 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.698009683 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5238095238 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266608160198 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786426188757 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119523068642 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188066176937 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867868305418 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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