It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that all people at the world are very sensitive about important happened around the world. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that we are very busy with the events of our personal lives and also believe that our society has enough big problem for yourselfe, thus we have not extra time for concern and know about the problem and happens in other countries. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that it is important to know about events happened around the world, even if times this happens is not high effect in our life.
First and foremost, today's we live in really complex world that we can not say one event in a far small country cannot be related to our or can not has influence in our life, from political differentiation till environmental happens all of them have indirect but very noticeable effect in the life of our Earth. For example, yesterday, I am reading an article about Hawaii volcano that had an eruption some hours of age. it is true that this region is very far from my hometown but this news led to I have become worried because I know about the harmful influence of this eruption in global warming and how our Earth has not good condition about this issue. Or, some political events, for example, some people who killed in Somalia, Surely, I know that the violent person in this country can not have threatened for me or my family but this news is very important for me because, at the first, I become upset for people of this country because all of the people should have happy and calm life and in the second, this kind of happens can be effected on economic and international relationships at the world.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that if we have not any attention about the event that happened around themselves, we cannot receive to behavioral and social maturity. Surely, humans have a gift of life for increasing their knowledge, personality and doing kind and valuable works for another people. Therefore, how we can achieve this ability without attention to events that happened around ours. We have this task for learning useful abilities and do helpful works for our society and our universe. Thus, obtaining information about happening is essential for this aim.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that it is very important for people to know about events that happen around the world. Because this happens to have the universal effect and it is the humanity task of ours.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...try cannot be related to our or can not has influence in our life, from political d...
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Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...that had an eruption some hours of age. it is true that this region is very far fr...
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Line 2, column 944, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...pset for people of this country because all of the people should have happy and calm life ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, kind of, it is true, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.471227122 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455357142857 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.438440026 48.9658058833 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.857142857 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232609808207 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118595643796 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102188007014 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199895354993 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824559385812 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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