The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to clean the environment. Agree or disagree?
As technology and economy advances, people’s life quality are improved constantly. Nowadays, people in growing numbers are beginning to pay more attention to environment and public health. There is no denying the fact that public health relates directly to environment. As for me, I am of the opinion that the most essential thing our government should consider in order to improve health care is cleaning the environment because a clean and neat surrounding not only do good to people’s physical health, but also benefits their psychological well-being.
A clean environment contributes directly to people’s physical fitness. It is common sense that contaminants from our living environment are major causes of many illnesses. Looking around us, these pollutions exist in every where – the plastic bag you just bought from store, the fume exhausted from cars you drove, the electronic waste you just throw without classifying it, and so on. If our government doesn’t take effective measures to stop these behaviors and clean these pollutions timely, our environment will contain countless trashes and toxic substances which is harmful to people’s health. A clean environment is the most vital factor we should consider when trying to obtain physical fitness.
A neat surroundings also benefit resident’s mental health. Nobody can live a delighted life when tons of trash surrounded him and everything is out of order. Recent psychological study shows that a well-arranged and neat environment helps people relax and exerts positive effect on people’s emotional and mental health, and this effect is especially obvious when people are under great pressure. Thus, in order to achieve social mental health and high productivity, a neat and comfort environment is indispensable. A prime example from my own experience may shed some light on the point. I used to be too lazy to clean my bedroom so everything was out of order and this had really affected my study efficiency. So one day I decided to clean my bedroom and arrange my stuff. After I finished my cleaning, I feel more delighted and become concentrated when studying. This example showed us that a neat environment is very helpful in gaining people’s mental health and improving social efficiency.
Essentially, a well-cleaned environment helps people obtain health in both physical and psychological aspect. Thus, I support the provided statement that government should clean our environment first in order to improve public health care.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 222, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...ng around us, these pollutions exist in every where – the plastic bag you just bought from ...
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Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'surrounding'?
Suggestion: surrounding
...ing to obtain physical fitness. A neat surroundings also benefit resident's mental hea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, so, thus, well, as for, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44050632911 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11559490009 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546835443038 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7459958882 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.45 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2202530321 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721801975882 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880126292927 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178047397399 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102458494271 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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