Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
Technology improvements provide that all family has a television and multimedia player. The wide and extensive influence of televisions programs or movies is not deniable. The advantages and disadvantages effects of media programs on young people always are the great concerns of parents. Some people may think that movies and television have more positive effects than negative effects. In my own perspective, I believe that the negative effects of Movies and especially televisions are more significant than their positive effects on young people's behavior. The following reasons and examples will elaborate on my opinion.
The first aspect to point out is that the televisions program could waste children's time and prevent them to do an effective tasks like reading books or doing their home works. Movie producers always exploit some attractive and interesting elements to their programs which could hold their audience many long times by the televisions. Young people could spend their time on learning different things and increase their ability and develop their performance instead of watching television inordinately. For example, my friend's young brother inclined to watch movie enormously. This inappropriate habit made him to put less effort on his homework and courses; consequently, he could not get the admission from a well-established university. His parents also, complaint that he is too lazy and does not work diligently.
Another noteworthy point to corroborating my stance is that most of the produced movies and television programs contains extremely graphical violence content. These scene are very harmful for young’s mental health and have very bad consequences on their behavior when they become older. Furthermore, these kind of programs always to attract the audiences, illustrates the thieves or bad characters very attractive and interesting. In some cases, of course in the movie these persons could run of the rules and enjoy of their illegitimate stolen money. There are a lot of documents indicate that many young people under the influence of these movies act violent behavior in the schools or universities.
To summarize my aforementioned arguments, I believe that the negative effects of movies and televisions on young people's behavior are more than their positive effects because most of television programs contain the violent scenes and also, they are very time-consuming.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 160, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scene' or 'These scenes'?
Suggestion: This scene; These scenes
...s extremely graphical violence content. These scene are very harmful for young's menta...
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Line 11, column 306, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...or when they become older. Furthermore, these kind of programs always to attract the audie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, for example, kind of, of course, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58490566038 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99352327946 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539083557951 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9161855614 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.111111111 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396257460414 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136823146957 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177195217812 0.0737576698707 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303994042712 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199509352062 0.0645574589148 309% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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