The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadays, the celebrities have vital role in our world. Because of their fame, they must treat well with other usual people of society. overall, popularity sometimes affects the lifestyle of everyone who the celebrities aren't exclusive of. In my view, the opinions of famous people are more effective on younger ones that can be followed by these reasons.
Firstly, most of the mid-age people consider the celebrities as their pioneer rather than old people. There is no much difference for old ones to change their life with favorite personalities, but young people are. For instance, the most adolescents follow the Hollywood actors' lifestyle and these juveniles tend to act like them. In this case, the adolescents usually consider the various factors in actors' personality, appearance, behavior, etc. These imitations usually affect the juveniles' life in terms of the education, entertainment. On the other hand, the personality of the old people is formed and they rarely change their lifestyle and are in a stable state.
Also, the popular people usually are rich and generous. Most of them dedicate much money to the charities or for humanitarian deeds. Not only This work can be very impressive for juveniles, but also can promote the culture of helping each other. To elucidate more this reason, I point out to this example. In recent years, Angelina Julie helps teen and young people in African countries because of famine and drought. It is a valuable deed for showing kindness in all the world. Thus, the young ones pursue their favorite celebrities to form the lifestyle in a best way.
To recap, the aforementioned justifications all demonstrate that the adolescents need to constitute their personality, appearance and other features by affecting and pursuing the popular people. Taking care to young ones is very important that old ones, because they will create and develop the communities based on their capabilities. Of course, there is a critical issue that it relies on the celebrities' behavior and personalities to induce the society to a direct way.
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- Sea otters are a small mammal that lives in the waters along North America's west coast from California to Alaska. A few years ago some of the sea otter populations off of the Alaskan coast started to decline rapidly and raised several concerns. 67
- The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Overall
...ell with other usual people of society. overall, popularity sometimes affects the lifes...
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Suggestion: aren't
...festyle of everyone who the celebrities arent exclusive of. In my view, the opinions ...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ioneer rather than old people. There is no much difference for old ones to change ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'juveniles'' or 'juvenile's'?
Suggestion: juveniles'; juvenile's
...tc. These imitations usually affect the juveniles life in terms of the education, enterta...
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...table state. Also, the popular people usually are rich and generous. Most of them dedicat...
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Suggestion: the
...te celebrities to form the lifestyle in a best way. To recap, the aforementio...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
... a critical issue that it relies on the celebrities behavior and personalities to induce th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, thus, well, for instance, of course, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18452380952 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83647659779 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1730312151 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138605383514 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397047014338 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550908019123 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088306592746 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04451690634 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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