The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We all have seen that celebrities' talks and activities can have a great effect on many people. As I have seen in my personal life, they can affect younger people more than older. I think this fact is because of two main reasons that I will discuss them in the paragraphs below.
First, celebrities are followed by younger people more than older people. Because usually younger people have more motivation to follow them; for example, celebrities' style works like patterns in every society. Style is an important factor for younger people because wearing trended dresses is always so important for them while older people don't pay attention to these things at all. Older people have found their style and gotten used to it. For older people, Leaving their style and following a new one, not only isn't exciting and attractive but also is bothering. So when celebrities are followed because of many different aspects, they can affect their audience in many other hidden aspects too.
Second, celebrities can stimulate younger people so much easier than older people. Older people have lived more than younger people and as they have lived more, they have many more experiences. All those experiences have taught them a lesson and all those lessons have formed their beliefs firmly. So we can say nothing can change older people and rarely anyone's opinion can affect them or seem important to them. But usually younger people aren't so strict on their opinions and when something seems better or truer to them, they will change their own beliefs. When it comes to someone whom they like and follow, their change will be much more significant. So the celebrities' opinion is important for younger ones much more.
In conclusion celebrities' opinions is important to younger people a lot and can affect them in a significant way. As their views affect younger a lot, it can affect and form the future of a society too; they can be a way to change society or a tool for ruining it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86094674556 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37261320954 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473372781065 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.083474402 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2777777778 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258108804497 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114685476864 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804888743405 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172237064662 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525515276701 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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