In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
Throughout history, a sport has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, researchers have always searched ways for enhancing the effect of sports. A controversial question which is often raised this idea is that doing individual exercise is better than the group sport or vice-versa. I contend that group sports would have a better influence on humans health. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that group sports improve the connection between people. To elaborate on my point, when individual play as a member of a team, she would speak with other members. Also, she learns how to better connect and respect to other people. When people work as group members, they learn how to tolerate disagree opinion, and how to defend their idea. Consider football teams for instance. The coach wants the football members that they practice with each other and take them a special position. One member may not like their position, but she learns how to respect her coach. But, if she doing sports alone, she may not learn how to respect and tolerate disagree idea.
Another reason is that group spots force people to do exercise without any excuse. To shed more light on this matter, since people do sports as a member of a team, they had to contribute to the exercise of the team. In this situation, they had to do sports. Hence, they doing some sports regularly. In other words, they can improve health and body situation. Also, they are able to protect their body from such diseases as a heart attack or blood pressure. In contrast, when people do exercise, they do not have a force to do sports regularly. Because they do not have a responsibility in this situation. Hence, if they do not have time to do sports, they can rest and do not do exercise. For example, when I want to go running, I can choose each time I want. In this situation, some guess or friend would come to my house probably. Therefore, I counsel my doing sports. But if I do sports as a group, I had to contribute to team sports. In other words, I would improve my health.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that group sports have more positive aspects than individual exercise. I believe that group sports not only improve the relationship but also improve human health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...sports would have a better influence on humans health. In the following paragraph, I w...
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Line 3, column 628, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...s how to respect her coach. But, if she doing sports alone, she may not learn how to ...
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Line 6, column 545, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ot have a force to do sports regularly. Because they do not have a responsibility in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in contrast, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74761904762 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58685408536 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461904761905 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.50178875 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.7586206897 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4827586207 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55172413793 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19195555546 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560671897878 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547665521645 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997892910889 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611293598544 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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