In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Nowadays, whenever people are doing something, they seem to have more options due to the rapid development of technology. And here is a claim that youngsters are better able to make their own decisions compared to young people in the past. As far as I am concerned, I accede to this opinion because of two reasons. The first one is that today's education is more perfect than the past and the second one is that children in the past are limited by the environment.
To begin with, today's education system is relatively impeccable, which enables students become dependent and make their decisions for themselves. Since government put a great deal of emphasis on education nowadays, students are likely to develop comprehensively. Not only knowledge is imparted to students, but moral values and other stuffs are instilled to students. And decision making is just one of them. Hence, children are better able to make their own decisions on account of the education they get. However, in the past students were poorly educated, which was especially true for most Chinese kids. Parents could hardly pay for the tuition fee and education seemed inaccessible to most people. Consequently, students now are better able to make their own decisions.
Secondly, young people in the past barely had chance to make decisions, which was caused by the environment they lived in. And financial income is a primary limitation to them. For instance, a child might want to go to school, but his or her parents forced this child to work in the farm because of the unfinished farm work. In this situation, the child may want to make a decision, to get education in the school, but his or her imagination is greatly impeded by the fact. Life was hard, if the kid did not work in the farm, his or her family might suffer from hunger. Although this example might be a little bit exaggeration, it perfectly illustrates my point. And it was the real case of most Chinese children in the past, about 50 years ago. In the contrast, people now are not limited by these conditions, so they will be better at making decisions.
In conclusion, since education plays an important role in kids' development, missing them can make them less able to make decisions. Besides, the environment can also serve as an impediment to their decision making.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
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Suggestion: little; bit
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87626262626 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73476687344 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520202020202 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4779999209 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7727272727 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22727272727 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411491562177 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117384607412 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129232871185 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241127920481 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0689280933402 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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