In the past several decades, the world has gone through massive changes on both a societal and an individual level. Nowadays, daily work increasingly concludes team cooperation. The debate over whether people who reject others’ criticism cannot succeed as a team is still fierce. Some may suggest that criticism from others can only affect our performance and should ignore them. However, I hold this view differently. I believe people should accept this criticism.
To begin with, embracing others’ criticism can actually benefit us and further help the whole team. When people admit some mistakes in a group activity, even if they could not realize it, their coworkers and superiors can precisely point out that since they have an objective viewpoint, which serves as a reminder to help us improve our own weaknesses and allow us to achieve further success at a team. Therefore, when others suggest some question or judgment, we should embrace them rather than waste time debating. For example, it is hard to imagine Scottie Pippen and Dennis Rodman becoming NBA super-star and the Chicago Bulls winning the NBA championship six times if they did not accept their teammate Michael Jordan’s advice about their shooting form. Similarly, it is also impossible for Cristiano Ronaldo, famous for his puzzling footwork and scoring, to become worldwide famous if he rejects advice from his coach.
Moreover, accepting others’ criticism makes teamwork smooth. More and more work today involve collaboration. People who only focus on their job and reject cooperating with others can never succeed as a team. During team cooperation, mistakes are inevitable, and if one is failed to accept others’ questions, the whole process will be affected. People who cannot accept criticism would create a hostile atmosphere, thereby reducing efficiency and further making it hard to achieve the shared goal. In a recent study conducted by Harvard University, when asked what the most critical quality during teamwork is, fifty-eight percent of people chose ‘accept others’ advice welly.’
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly that people who cannot accept criticism cannot achieve success in a team for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 290, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...eed as a team is still fierce. Some may suggest that criticism from others can only aff...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37428571429 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67996497083 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.3131832617 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.647058824 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414261608278 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123496126779 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116444166624 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301524068794 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137215535546 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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