In order to improve students’ school experience, plenty of schools have various types of after-school activities. Sports, arts, and volunteer activities are three common after-school activities. Considering the limited budget, only one activity can continue. Indeed the first two have their own advantages. However, these advantages are pale when compared with taking part in volunteering activities.
To begin with, there is much education that occurs outside the class, and volunteering activities can help students learn a lot. Isolated in their ivory towers, students, even some senior students, have no idea about the real world. They do not know what kinds of jobs they are interested in and what types of life they prefer. Consider that volunteering activities can provide students with an excellent opportunity to have a comprehensive and objective understanding of the real world and help them figure out their dream. Use my personal experience as an example. During a volunteer activity, I meet my friend Frank. He defeated a high-paid job and devoted himself to charity funding in order to help children from unprivileged families get into school. I was touched deeply by his spirit and knew how a dream could encourage people to give up materialism and achieve one’s dreams.
Some may suggest that sports can help students keep in shape, contributing to their physical health. Nevertheless, students nowadays are busy taking classes, doing assignments, and preparing for exams daily. Suppose that, after a long day, students are so exhausted that they have no extra energy to do some exercise. As for Arts, some believe arts can enable students to develop curiosity and creativity, which could lead to mental development. While in my opinion, using funding for the arts is totally a waste of money. Students are motivated to paint or draw only when they show great interest in the art field. Imagine students are forced to paint or draw. They would only feel bored and waste time, which works against their self-efficacy.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly a wiser choice to continue volunteering activities for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...budget, only one activity can continue. Indeed the first two have their own advantages...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...sm and achieve one’s dreams. Some may suggest that sports can help students keep in s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, as for, as to, even so, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28779069767 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86720319788 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4571385998 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6818181818 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372808527401 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941700054886 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843379853015 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206216450613 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106757334057 0.0645574589148 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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