people who give extra money to charity or good are happier than people who spend their money on themselves
People always appreciate money, not for money itself, but for things money can do. In my opinion, undoubtedly, individuals who help needy people and contribute to the welfare of their society are a lot blissful than others. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, showing gratitude to God, which means people who donate to charity feel that God has blessed them with many blessings and deprived others, and that is a way to thank God. For instance, a long time ago, when I was a child, my father was donating a lot of money monthly to social charities, which support orphans and homeless shelters. Frankly, I could expect that my dad had just helped some poor people, only from his glowing face and happiness that it always showed. Although our neighbor was a wealthy man, however, he was stingy and never helped any poor people. Unlike my dad, who had striking satisfying and happy expressions on his face, our neighbor seemed nervous and gloomy most time. Admittedly, when I look back, I see how dad had peace of mind and pleasure. As you can see, my dad, like many other humans who experiences the thrill of giving needy people.
Secondly, another remarkably potential reason is the higher likelihood of perceiving relief by eliminating the hardship that some miserable people are enduring. To be more specific, when you sense that you can draw a grin on another human being who is calling out for help by offering him money, that will boost your sense of you with overwhelming pleasure. For example, a few years ago, I granted a substantial amount of money to two boys in a foster home who endured unfortunate hardship by losing their parents, which turned their lives upside down; made them lose hope in any future. I still recall the thrilling feeling on their faces when they realized that I granted that money for their living cost and education journey. Honestly, the pleasure was all mine by that immensely high level of joy and cheerfulness. If it had not for that donation, I would never have felt that I was over the moon from happiness. This experience taught me that the money you donate to help some poor people will please you more than you can ever imagine.
In conclusion, I believe that granting money to charity does bring about delights to people. Not only because it makes them feel that they are thankful to God, but it also pleases them because they bring joy to others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, frankly, honestly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 30.0 11.0286738351 272% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71229698376 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44016029061 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549883990719 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5743605623 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.894736842 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251198619277 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734951761529 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072346007148 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163275294731 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844159616422 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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