In today’s consuming-driven society, materialism increasingly dictates our happiness. The debate over whether people would be happier when they use their extra money for charity than use it for themselves is still fierce. Some suggest it is more advantageous that spending money on themselves. However, I hold this view differently. I believe people will feel more satisfied when they use extra money to do good.
To begin with, for some people, especially those who are famous, the reason why they have so many possessions is that there are plenty of people supporting them. If they can use their money to return to society and their community, it can help them set a good reputation and provide them with self-efficacy. According to Maslow’s hierarchy of needs, everyone has some instinctive need to be respected and self-actualization. Suppose someone no longer needs to be concerned about some basic physiological needs like food or clothes. In that case, they will pursue further happiness, which can be provided by the charity and doing good. My grandfather is a suitable example here. He started from nothing to create his own business vehicle repair when he was young. He gained much money and supported his family. However, his possessions did not bring him happiness, and he still felt lonely and hollow at an advanced age. Therefore, he used his extra money to donate food to children from unprivileged families in his community. Increasingly people started to join this charity event, and he felt respected by local residents. Now, For him, there is no great happiness than doing good.
Indeed, people using the money for themselves is a right, and nothing can be blamed. As an old saying goes, “Enough is as good as a feast.” Extra possession can not bring us true happiness. Numerous middle-class people drive fancy cars, wear luxury clothes, and live in well-oriented houses but rarely feel happy. Their vehicles are good enough compared with those on the street, but if a brand-new series of cars are released, they feel miserable since they cannot afford it. Therefore, their greed always overruns what they own, leaving no happiness and satisfaction.
In a nutshell, in order to obtain more happiness, spending the extra money on charity or doing good is undoubtedly a wiser choice for the reasons discussed above.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1171875 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87272989331 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572916666667 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9027777727 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4347826087 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6956521739 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326283739409 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837283503194 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809448669966 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214860029096 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634958298025 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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