Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them
Regarding to improvement of societies<span class="hiddenSpellError" pre="of "></span> by the growth of technologies, people face new challenges. One of this controversial challenges is that children should play with computer games or not.some people strongly believe that playing computer games does not have advantages for children; but I profoundly believe that playing computer games is a highly beneficial for children and I will elaborate on my reasons throughout this essay.
To begin, there is a lot of evidence which proving video games increase children skills especially, communication skills. For example, some computer games designing in away which players should help to gether to pass the step or talk together to conduct a plan for overcoming complicated challenges in a game. children who attend this games learn how communicating with other peer. Moreover, some other games can boost children cognitive process in their mind, and affect childrens'minds in a positive way.
In addition, people who play computer games learn how to work with computer and the Internet. Actually computer games are attractive for children; as a result, when they are trying to learn how to play with computer, and how to install games on the computers, they learn to work with computers too. Everybody knows about crucial roles of computers in modern life, and it is necessary for people to know how to work with computers. For example, recently, because of high incidence of COVID-19 virus in my country, we should stay at home and do our jobs and works at home, my sister having six years old knowing about working with computers through playing computer games and she helps my father to handle his financial tasks online without going to banks.
To end, I think it is true that computer games have some drawbacks for children too, but I profoundly believe that its' advantages are out weighted from its' disadvantages. I recommend that help children manage computer games side effects instead of putting aside this valuable games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38343558282 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26004933061 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555214723926 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.6239556349 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.25 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319498585747 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13202711084 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967332692749 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2073435842 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545195655912 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 11.7677419355 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.