Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Nowadays, computer are very popular between children. This popularity comes from different sources such as their high quality images, having different missions and so on. But, I think playing computer games is a waste of time because of two reasons.
First, they can hurt children's health. For palying these games, you have to stare in TV screen for a long time. Because of that you can loose your sight. For example one of my friend was playing a game called Counter all the time. When I was coming from school, I saw him that was playing the game in game house. After a while, he was complaining about chronic headaches. When he went to doctor, after a lot examination, it turns out that he became his eys sight had decreased and he has to wear glasses and doctor warn him to not play. Also, I have some hearsays about loosing life because of eccessive playing games. So this shows how much these games can be dangerous.
Second, these can addict children. Because of their high graphic, excitment and the story, they can attract children for so long and make children greedy of playing. Thereby, parents can not stop their children from playing. This can cause of lot of problem such as decreasing grad of children and dropping school. For instance, When was in high school, I was palying a game call Soldier. I was playing all the time. In school, I was thinking of how to do missions and to solve problems. When I came back to home, I turn on the computer and started to play and noone could stop me. I remember sometimes I didn't even eat anything until night. After a while, my grads declinded a lot and I couldn't pass some courses. So, my parents came with ingenious plan. They break my mouse and didn't buy it. Beecause of that I couldn't play. So my grads increased.
In sum, playing games by children is a waste of time because that can hurt children's health and cause addiction. Although, playing this games under observation of parents can prevent these disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: lose
...or a long time. Because of that you can loose your sight. For example one of my frien...
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...rted to play and noone could stop me. I remember sometimes I didnt even eat anything until night. ...
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...e could stop me. I remember sometimes I didnt even eat anything until night. After a ...
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...a while, my grads declinded a lot and I couldnt pass some courses. So, my parents came ...
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...ingenious plan. They break my mouse and didnt buy it. Beecause of that I couldnt play...
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...se and didnt buy it. Beecause of that I couldnt play. So my grads increased. In sum, p...
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...t childrens health and cause addiction. Although, playing this games under observation o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61473087819 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4197477141 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518413597734 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5844272308 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.1785714286 100.406767564 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.6071428571 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310678961169 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925329362606 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103456454338 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237370379061 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625087676625 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 11.7677419355 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.57 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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