Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them
How we use time plays an important role in our lives. As all have 24 hours in a day, it depends on individuals whether their usage of time lead to enhance or deprive their lives. Many people think that playing computer games is waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them, whereas others, I am sure would disagree. In my opinion, I prefer the former and will provide two reasons in the coming passage.
To begin with, playing computer games would plummet our academic performance. As we play computer games daily, we start to deviate from our regular routine which can lead to decline in productivity of our lives. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. In my childhood, when I return from my school, I regularly played cricket for an hour and then after used to practice academics what was taught in the school for atleast 2 hours. Indeed, this was my key secret to top among my friends in the school. During summer holidays, my cousins from downtown came to my house. They were the one who injected playing computer games is fun. Since, those were holidays I also preferred to play with them the then popular game, Vice-city which became my addiction sooner. As soon as our holidays completed and classes started all around, they left to their home. As I am addicted to play computer games, as soon as I return from my school I wasted precious time playing this useless game which ended up me in scoring low in the examinations and made me feel humiliated among my friends. Had i not got in contact with those computer games, I would not be in such a desperate situation today.
Furthermore, playing computer games dispairs our physical health. The more we play computer games, the less we allot our time to do physical activities. For instance, as I mentioned earlier I was used to be play cricket for an hour before my new reform of playing computer games, I was used to be fit. When I am accustomed to sit and play a lot computer games, I eventually gained weight a lot and made me obese. From then after, I was used to feel enervated even when I was involved in any smaller sessions of physical activities. In the longer run, this was the main cause of making me a patient of high blood pressure.
In conclusion, I support children should not waste their time playing computer games. Not only does it plummets your academic performance but also it does worse your physical health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to sitting'.
Suggestion: accustomed to sitting
... games, I was used to be fit. When I am accustomed to sit and play a lot computer games, I eventu...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to feeling'.
Suggestion: used to feeling
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Message: Did you mean 'plummet'?
Suggestion: plummet
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Message: Did you mean 'plummet'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: plummet
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, then, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58755760369 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50535856729 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506912442396 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3296947399 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5652173913 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8695652174 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43355797453 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137537995035 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15897549092 0.0737576698707 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298361896919 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796282688262 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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