Nowadays, people focus more on their big events such as weddings and graduation, some individuals like to record them to have a better remember of that events. This issue is always be discussed for many times. However, I personally think that people don’t have to take a lot of pictures when they joining some big events. I will elaborate on my discussion for three reasons.
First and foremost, recording or taking photos, needs a lot of bugdet to buy devices. It will be a presure for host who wants to prepare the event. A durable camera is expensive and its storage is not so abundant in anytimes, so people need to buy some extend storage devices to support their delicate cameras or microphones. Hosting a spellbinding event is costy, so people need more effective methods save their money. For instance, reducing the cost of buying new camera is a good way to cut off the budgets for many people.
Secondly, recording videos for memorize can easily offence others, because not everyone wants to disappear in a video or a photograph, especially in other’s device. Today our personal data is more important than before so we have to try our best to protect it. Be recorded in other’s events would cause a leak of our personal figures. In addition, people usually want to have a relaxing time with our close friends, so they can get off some sensitive rules or routines. Nevertheless, when people under a camera, they always need to take attention on their activities.
Finally, some people may give an understanding that a record can give them more strong memories. It may somewhat useful to people who want to remeber specificly. However, people can remember big events by many ways, they do not need a certain way such as taking pictures to help them have a good memory. When people are involved in a very big event, they will totally tap into it. As we all know, focusing on a something can gives us a good memory for it. Everyone can have a good memory on his/her graduation party or wedding. On the other hand, taking pictures and recording many videos, somewhat will disrupt peoples’ memories because they need additional activities. For a better memory, people need to put themselves all into the events, instead of just holding a big camera or taking a phone to make a lot of pieces of events.
In conclusion, for these magnificant things in people’s lives, they need to be debated and communicated for many times. In my opinion, I really believe that it is unnecessary for people to use their devices to record some events in their life. As a intellectual annimal, a person can remeber the most important thing in his/her life journey.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...in anytimes, so people need to buy some extend storage devices to support their delica...
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Line 7, column 426, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...e all know, focusing on a something can gives us a good memory for it. Everyone can h...
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Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...to record some events in their life. As a intellectual annimal, a person can reme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78787878788 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6485618326 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493506493506 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6106869643 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.48 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.48 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161864277656 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499628003432 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637173045769 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954892634753 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162431248818 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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