There is no doubt that parents should reward their children when they are doing great on an exam. However, it is where the agreement stops. When talking about the way to praise their children, parents have different perspective. Some parents give their children money to reward the high scores on an exam. On the other hand, instead of giving them money, some parents inspire their children by offering material satisfaction such as taking them out for a nice dinner or mental compliment. Personally, I advocate the statement to give school-age children money to encourage them, and there are some reasons illustrated below to support my opinion.
To begin with, giving children money help them learn how to make decisions by themselves by using the money to buy stuff and be responsible for them. By doing so, they will have more understanding about the real life sooner in the future. My mother used to tell me that life is made by a serious of choices; choose what you love and love what you choose. For instance, if a child decides to buy something expensive which's price is higher than his parent gave him, he has to study harder to win more money. On the other hand, if another child chooses to buy something she can afford, she may not be able to buy something fancy. Then, she has to take the risk that other children will laugh at her. No matter which choice a child choose, he will learn the result from it.
Moreover, it is a good chance for school-age students to learn the concept of saving money. Saving money is an essential skill when they grow up. Because we never know what will happen next, so we must save some money for the emergency. I believe to learn as many skills as younger is of benefit to students. Because when they enter a society, they will not have time to learn. Even they do have time, people are more strict to grownup than to students. As a result, parents can educate their children the important of saving money by rewarding them when they do well on the exams as younger as possible.
In sum, rather than buying something unnecessary to children or taking them out for dinner, offering children money and teaching them how to it is a better and more practical way to encourage children.
- TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. 30
- It is difficult for teachers to be both popular (well liked) and effective in helping students learn. Agree or disagree? 73
- TPO 50 integrated 3
- TPO INTEGRATED 44 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 592, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...en they do well on the exams as younger as possible. In sum, rather than buying s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, as to, for instance, no doubt, such as, talking about, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61712846348 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37806855349 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513853904282 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9139834707 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2857142857 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281388702688 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086771504003 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662881546808 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173677303022 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749884961286 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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