There are many ways for parents to reward their children when they are doing great on an exam. Some parents give their children money to reward the high scores. On the other hand, instead of giving them money, some parents inspire their children by taking them out for a nice dinner. Personally, I prefer to give shool-age children money to encourge them. There are some reasons illustrated below to support my opinion.
To begin with, giving children money help them learn how to make decisions by themselves by using the money to buy stuff and be responsible for them. By doing so, they will have more understanding about the real life sooner in the future. My mother used to tell me that life is made by a serious of choices; choose what you love and love what you choose. For instance, if a child decides to buy something expensive which's price is higher than his parent gave him, he has to study harder to win more money. On the other hand, if another child chooses to buy something she can afford, she may not be able to buy something fancy. Then, she has to take the risk that other children will laugh at her. No matter which choice a child choose, he will learn the result from it.
Moreover, it is a good chance for school-age students to learn the concept of saving money. Saving money is an essential skill when they grow up. Because we never know what will happen next, so we must save some money for the emergency. I believe to learn as many skills as younger is of benefit to students. Because when they enter a society, they will not have time to learn. Even they do have time, people are more strict to grownup than to students. As a result, parents can educate their children the important of saving money by rewarding them when they do well on the exams as younger as possible.
In sum, rather than buying something unnecessary to children or taking them out for dinner, offering children money and teaching them how to it is a better and more practical way to encourage children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 592, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...en they do well on the exams as younger as possible. In sum, rather than buying ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, then, well, as to, for instance, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51790633609 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27378721423 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520661157025 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0292979162 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273036551818 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900448346186 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642198765336 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170630536805 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703101680396 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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