Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
In today's modern world education plays important role in children's life. if children want to be successful in their future life and career, they should study hard in the school years and learn more skills. their parents also have a duty to encourage them to hardly studying and give them motivation in various ways. Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. However other parents disagree with this way. From my vantage point, children should receive a prize for their great actions it makes them do it more and more, I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First of all, when parents give their children rewards for their good grades and they offer more money for high grades the student encouraged to try to learn more and study with more passion and they endure the difficulty of the exam for giving prize and it is so sweet for them. For example, when I was an elementary school student my father offered me money or a valuable prize for my full score on my report card. The next year I tried harder for giving a high score in my lessons and because of giving a good reward. Moreover, it helped me to know how much education is important and valuable.
Finally, earning and spending money is a very difficult task in today's modern world, Children should learn it at a young age. The children learn for earning money they should do their duty as well as they can and they learn to spend the money for buying essential things because they tried hard for earning this money with hard studying and they have to save it. So when parents give their children money as a prize, children learn how much they did a good job and they earn their own money, this way increases their self-confidence too.
In conclusion, when parents offer their school-age children money for their high marks, it has two benefits for them. First, it encourages them to study hard and they learn how much education is important and valuable. Second, it helps them to know earning money is difficult these days and they should save it and earning and spending their own money increases their self-confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35351449346 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436842105263 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9998675846 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.625 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441819871931 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17281918397 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185393918363 0.0737576698707 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305424592127 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569943010661 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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