Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Currently, society has witnessed an unprecedented accumulation of material affluence, thus there is an increasing number of parents attaching more importance to their children's upbringing. Some of them give their children money as rewards for children's good academic performance in exams, while others contend that this behavior is detrimental to children's growth. Personally speaking, I concur with those parents' rewarding behaviors and my view can be substantiated as follows.
To start with, the money is and has always been an optimal motivator for students without stable income. Owing to our instincts of desires for money, all children are eager to earn there rewards, therefore they are motivated to spare no efforts to improve their academic performance, for instance, they are likely to do extra school assignments, asking their teachers for more profound knowledge to eradicate the puzzles or they probably enroll in some curriculums for further improvement of studies. Therefore, through all these endeavors, they come to realize that learning is meaningful, it is not only rewarding for money but also contributes to their future development, thus a virtuous circle is erected exerting long-lasting effects on children's academic performance. The research conducted to evaluate children's willingness of learning demonstrates that 88% student, promised by their parents to give money reward for their high grade, have made progress in their tests. Some of them even obtain significant achievement in their studies. For instance, Rebecca, one of those testers, who always got passing scores in the basic chemistry, improves her poor performance in this curriculums gradually. Each time she wanted to give up, she was reminded of the rewards her parents promise to render, thus she, motivated by the rewards, endeavored to tackle with all problems confronted with her. This example illuminates that money, as a kind of optimal motivators, constitutes a stepping stone in students' enhancement of their academic performance.
What's more, additionally, giving children money as rewards is conducive to their growth. Nowadays, with the implementation of one-child policy, a myriad of children have been spoiled, which makes them unaware of the efforts they have to pay for earning a living. Some of them even splurge money on diversified needless affairs, like electronic devices, computer games. With this kind of reward, they are entitled to explore their parents whole-heartedly devote to the family and realize that the money they spend is supposed to be cherished. Meanwhile, since they are introduced to money at a tender age, they are rendered with an optimal approach to mastering the money-management skills. Not only can they know where the money comes from but also amass some information about money management, like depositing money in the bank for profits, investing them in products which can be utilized for years. Hence, money rewards can also contribute to children's growth in other domains.
Admittedly, making the use of children's desires for money is not without flaws. Driven by the desires, it is self-evident that they are inclined to become altruistic, nevertheless, this propensity can be suppressed by appropriate parental control.
In a nutshell, from what has been mentioned above, it is a preferred approach for parents to give their school-age children money as rewards for their great academic performance. For one thing, they, driven by money, can enhance their performance. For another, they are not only reminded of their parents' devote to their families but also entitled to grasp a bunch of money management skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, kind of, for one thing, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3094.0 1977.66487455 156% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44718309859 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96323057982 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50176056338 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 963.0 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1449653839 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.52173913 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6956521739 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379177539145 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120340433097 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676475557422 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231588809962 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607697451885 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 86.8835125448 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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