some people believe that it is an important part of a chid's education to go on field trips, others think that a child's time is better spent in a classroom at school
Nowadays, people have increasingly attached great importance on eduaction. Some beileve that it is more importance for students to participants some field trips while others thinks kids' should spend more time in classroon to get education. From where I stand, I concur with the idea that field trip is an essential part in education for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, field trip is able to provide opportunity for kids to acquire knowledge that they could not know in the classroom. The youth could be exposed to the real works or devices that only appear on the textbooks if they just learn in the classroom context, during which they are able to gain deeper understandings. My personal experience provides a striking example. I was into art when I was in junior school. However, I found that it was not enough for me to learn some painting skill from the printed pictures on the textbooks or on the powerpoint presented by the teachers. Therefore, I enjoyed a field trip organized by the art club to visit a famous art museum. In that trip, I appreciated the works by extraordinary painters and carefully analyzed the structure of those paints from different angle. Moreover, the real and thick brushes and the vivid color gave me deep impression. In that trip, it seemd that I established some connections with those works and I was totally immersed in the art kingdom.
Secondly, children could gain more pratical experience in the field trip to benefit their study. For some subjects, especially biology or chemistry, it is necessary to organize field trip to help students to get personal experience and pratical knowledge which is hard to acuqire in the classroom. For example, in the biology class, some skillful teachers would ask young students to go outside to observe and make comparison the leaves or trucks of different trees, during which students not only could apply the observation method taught in the classroom but also can stimulate their passion and interesting towards the subject in their real expeience. For some kids, the field trip could dispel the dullfullness in the classroom, thereby becoming more passionate to the course.
To sum up, compared to spending most of time in the classroom, I still believe that it is more essential for young kids to go through fied trips outside the class.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, as to, for example, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95477386935 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72331211543 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51256281407 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8027622474 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4117647059 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257196075033 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777340393368 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057764611905 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166009249444 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692149654933 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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