Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays, youngsters are constantly under too much pressure and they can hardly find some time to relax. Here is a claim that children should have fun playing games or sports when their parents do not have enough time to spend with them. While some people think that students are supposed to focus on student and use that time to study, I believe that students should use that time to relax. This is because after some relaxation, their study efficacy can be enhanced. Besides, there are other benifits playing games or sports.
To begin with, playing games or sports could help kids relieve the pressure from study. Sometimes students can feel overwhelmed due to the heavy burden exerted by the teachers or parents. Therefore, some entertainments can greatly assuage their pressure. Besides, if they relax for a while and then go back to study, they can study even more efficiently. Hence, playing games or sports is definitely necessary.
Secondly, games or sports could promote the friendship. In most cases, children will play games or sports with their friends since these games will become boring without the company of friends. So during the process of playing, their friendship will improve invisibly. What I have experienced can fully illustrate this point. When I was in high school, I liked playing basketball very much. And I played almost every weekend, which made me get acquainted with Tony. After several weeks of playing basketball with him, I became his best friend. We shared our secrets and went out playing basketball whenever it's possible.
Last but not least, playing games can improve one's intelligence and playing sports can improve our cooperation skills. For instance, when you are playing the computer game called Angry Birds, you have to formulate a plan according to the layout of the birds. You may also adopt different strategy when having different number of birds. So this is how you get your intelligence developed when playing computer games. As for sports, cooperation can be significant. Like when you are playing basketball, you must find the right time to pass the ball since it is not your own game, you have to collaborate with others in order to win. Therefore, playing games and sports are conducive to us.
In conclusion, children do need some relaxation. Since playing games and sports have some advantages, we should play them.
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, as for, for instance, in conclusion, in most cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07868020305 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5304619442 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543147208122 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0913852917 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1111111111 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5925925926 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349379259537 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885230701198 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852313877437 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204805422109 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129882828876 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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