Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, parents work most of their time, and they have a limited time to spend with their children. While some believe that parents should spend that time to help their children in their homework, others believe that parents should have fun and play games with their children. I, based on my knowledge, subscribe to the latter idea. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, if parents have fun with their kids, there will be a friendlier environment at home, and children will enjoy it. I mean, When parents play fun games with their children, everyone will have a good time. Because they know they will have fun, children will look forward to seeing their parents every day. Moreover, This will lead to a better relationship between parents and children. My own example illustrates this reality. When I was a child, every time I came back from school, I waited impatiently for my father to come home. We played so many games and had quite a lot of fun. I enjoyed it so much that I always wanted to hang out with my dad. Those days helped me to make a great relationship with my father so much that I still love to hang out with him.
Second, not everything in life is schoolwork, and there are more important things to learn. Parents can teach many different things to their children by playing games and sports. Furthermore, no one can guarantee that the future of children will be determined in school. They might be interested in sports and want to be an athlete later on. If they can learn those sports properly from their parents at a very young age, they have more time to practice and can distinguish themselves in the future. For instance, about ten years ago, there was a family who lived near us. They had basketball equipment, and the father was a former basketball player. Their son played basketball with the father every day since he was a little boy. After a few years, the boy became a professional basketball player and even played for the National team.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that, in their free time, parents should play fun games and sports with their children. By doing so, children will grow in a better environment and can learn many important things, which might be helpful in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, so, still, while, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6487804878 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42603860144 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50487804878 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0064332149 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.4166666667 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0833333333 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345934963633 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10088609249 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119551425651 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251478410335 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09302231745 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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